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If there is any improvement your city can do to make public transport more convenient, what is it

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I think increasing subway stations is going to make improvement in my city.
There is a lot of cars already, so we have a bad traffic during rush hour.
If we have more subway stations, which is near by downtown, people take subway instead of their car.
It can be solve traffic problem.
Also people can have more spare time to improve themselves or take a rest, after work.

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Thank you for this Ji Eun!

I think increasing subway stations is going to make improvement in my city.
>>> correct
There is a lot of cars already, so we have a bad traffic during rush hour.
>>> correct
If we have more subway stations, which is near by downtown, people take subway instead of their car.
>>> If we have more subway stations, which is nearby downtown, people would take the subway instead of their car.
It can be solve traffic problem.
>>> It can solve the traffic problem.
Also people can have more spare time to improve themselves or take a rest, after work.
>>> correct
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