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I agree with Ben's opinion. I think school's important function is students belong to group whith their friends. They can play and communicate with their friends. To go school and to study with their friends is very important for student

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Hello, Henry!
Good job on this. School not only serves as a place for academic learning but also plays a crucial role in fostering social connections among students.
~ Teacher Maxine


I agree with Ben's opinion. 
>> CORRECT!
OR >> I concur with Ben's perspective.

I think school's important function is students belong to group whith their friends. 
>> I think the important function of school is for students to belong to a group with their friends.

They can play and communicate with their friends. 
>> CORRECT!
OR >> They have the ability to engage in play and communicate with their friends.

To go school and to study with their friends is very important for student
>> Going to school and studying with their friends is very important for a student.
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