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Even the most strict government cannot do something about this. It will all depend on the person whether to give in to such kind of temptation.
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The government can't control all kinds of gambling and pornographic videos sites.
>>>The government can't control all kinds of gambling and pornographic video sites.

Even elementary students can access pornographic videos for free.
>>> CORRECT!

Online system can be beneficial but it can also be dangerous because nobody control these contents.
>>> Online systems can be beneficial but they can also be dangerous because nobody controls these contents.

There are lots of illegal, violent and suggestive yellow journalism.
>>>  There is a lot of illegal, violent, and suggestive yellow journalism.

It makes people corrupt at fast speed.
>>>  It makes people corrupt at a fast speed.

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