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Share some of the beauty standards in Korea. Do you agree with your country\'s beauty standards?

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The beauty standards in Korea are small face with V shape, thin body, and healthy hair. First of all, the white and smooth skin is the most important.
In the past, the person who has the big eye with double eyelid was one of the beauty standards.
However, theses days, the eyes with double eyelid is not as preferred as it was in the past.
The beauty standards change.
I prefer intellectual and innocent looks to fancy looks. And these looks can't be defined the beauty standards of Korea.
Everyone looks different.
Appearance can not be choose.
The beauty comes from being healthy.
If you have healthy mental and body, your confidence will make you more beautiful.

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Hi Jamie, I like how you wrote your homework. I agree with your opinion. Thank you for answering your homework today. Enjoy your weekend!
~ T. Demi ^^


The beauty standards in Korea are small face with V shape, thin body, and healthy hair. First of all, the white and smooth skin is the most important.
>> The beauty standards in Korea include; a small V-shaped face, a thin body, and healthy hair. But the most important is having white and smooth skin.
In the past, the person who has the big eye with double eyelid was one of the beauty standards.
>> In the past, having big eyes with double eyelids was one of the beauty standards.
However, theses days, the eyes with double eyelid is not as preferred as it was in the past.
>> However, these days the eyes with double eyelids are no longer preferred as it was in the past.
The beauty standards change.
>> The beauty standards had changed.
I prefer intellectual and innocent looks to fancy looks. And these looks can't be defined the beauty standards of Korea.
>> I prefer intellectual and innocent looks compared to fancy looks. These looks can't be defined by the beauty standards of Korea.
Everyone looks different.
>>CORRECT!
Or>> Everyone is unique.

Appearance can not be choose.
>> Appearance can not be chosen.
The beauty comes from being healthy.
>> CORRECT!
Or>> Being healthy shows the beauty within.

If you have healthy mental and body, your confidence will make you more beautiful.
>> If you have a healthy mind and body, then your confidence will make you more beautiful.
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