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Describe a piece of advice you recently received.

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Recently, I received some advice from my mom. She says, "you shouldn't guess badly that how do people think about you becaues It makes you feel hopeless." after I had a quarrel with my sister. My sister didn't talk about me directly but I can feel ill from she's behavior and accent. so I just thought about 'she doesn't like me' and than I spoke candidly to my mom about that. Mom says "It's just your guessing, don't do that' so I accepted she's advice and than I can settle a conflict with my sister.

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Hey Sarah! I'm glad you were able to tell me about an advice you received recently from your mom. I hope you and your sister wouldn't argue that much anymore. Keep it up with the writing tasks. Looking forward to the next one ^^

~~Teacher Ryka^^

Recently, I received some advice from my mom.
>> CORRECT.

She says, "you shouldn't guess badly that how do people think about you becaues It makes you feel hopeless." 
>>She said, "You shouldn't think about how people think about you because it can make you feel hopeless."

after I had a quarrel with my sister. 
>> After I had an argument with my sister.

My sister didn't talk about me directly but I can feel ill from she's behavior and accent. 
>> I didn't hear my sister talk bad about me directly but I felt like she did basing from her behavior and tone.

so I just thought about 'she doesn't like me' and than I spoke candidly to my mom about that. 
>> So, I thought she just doesn't like me and spoke with my mom candidly about it.

Mom says "It's just your guessing, don't do that' so I accepted she's advice and than I can settle a conflict with my sister.
>> My mom said, "Don't overthink about simple things." I accepted her advice and settled the conflict between my sister and I.
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