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Q: What are some ways people can get rid of obesity?
A: I think the easiest way would be losing weight slowly.
If they try to lose weight fast, I think it's possibly harder to get rid of it, so they might eat less, and exercise more gradually.
Also, they can also use the medical way to get rid of obesity.

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Hi, Paul!

Thank you for answering your homework!

~T. Divina^^

Here are some notes to consider:

1. I think the easiest way would be losing weight slowly.
>>CORRECT!

2. If they try to lose weight fast, I think it's possibly harder to get rid of it, so they might eat less, and exercise more gradually.
>>If they try to lose weight fast, I think it's harder to possibly get rid of it, so they might as well eat less and exercise more gradually.

3. Also, they can also use the medical way to get rid of obesity.
>>Also, they can use the medical way to get rid of obesity.

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