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I think kids should have cell phone. Because it is necessary thing to search information or communicate other people nowadays.
But they have to control themselves.

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Hello, Henry!
Absolutely, having a cell phone can be essential for kids in today's world, especially for accessing information and staying connected. It's crucial for them to learn how to manage and control their usage responsibly. Teaching them about responsible phone use is key. 
~ Teacher Maxine

I think kids should have cell phone. Because it is necessary thing to search information or communicate other people nowadays.
>> I think kids should have a cell phone because it is a necessary tool for searching information and communicating with others nowadays.

But they have to control themselves.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> However, they need to learn how to control their usage.
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