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~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
What are the pros and cons of living in another city?

It's not easy to leave our hometown and living in another city.
Aside from the negative cases, the big reason for moving is get a job, study, and easy access.
This means that if I move to a city from outskirts of the city, I want to a better infrastructure than before lived.
On the other way, some people cases where they go a quiet and airy countryside.
To sum it up, I think the pros of living is self-satisfaction.
But, I think the cons of living in another city is that we don't know well the downside until we experience it ourselves.
For example, some people moved because wanted more comfortable life than where before they lived, but there are people who feel uncomfortable.

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Hi, Keon!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Camille


~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
What are the pros and cons of living in another city?


It's not easy to leave our hometown and living in another city.
>> It's not easy to leave our hometown to live in another city.
Aside from the negative cases, the big reason for moving is get a job, study, and easy access.
>> Aside from the negative cases, the big reason for moving is to get a job, to study, and to have an easy access.
This means that if I move to a city from outskirts of the city, I want to a better infrastructure than before lived.
>> This means that if I move to a city from the outskirts of the city, I want to live in a better infrastructure than where I lived before.
On the other way, some people cases where they go a quiet and airy countryside.
>> On the other way, in some people's cases, they go to a quiet and airy place in the countryside.
To sum it up, I think the pros of living is self-satisfaction.
>> To sum it up, I think the pros of living in another city is self-satisfaction.
But, I think the cons of living in another city is that we don't know well the downside until we experience it ourselves.
>> CORRECT!
For example, some people moved because wanted more comfortable life than where before they lived, but there are people who feel uncomfortable.
>> For example, some people moved because they wanted to have a more comfortable life than where before they lived, but there are people who feel uncomfortable.
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