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ESSAY: Some people believe that price is the only consideration when buying something. Do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give your opinion and include relevant examples.

Price is important option to buy something. But It isn't only important factor for purchase.
It improves one thinking if cost is the best thing of something, why we don't choose chinese thing.
something that chinese make are very cheap beacause of many workers.
But we can't use chinese things even if hate.
Because these are low quarity.

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Hi there Lee~!^^ No one can go back in time to change what has happened, so work on your present to make yourself a wonderful future. Enjoy your day~!
>>> TEACHER GEMMA
Price is important option to buy something.
>>> Price is an important factor in purchasing something.
But It isn't only important factor for purchase.
>>> However, it's not the only important factor. 
It improves one thinking if cost is the best thing of something, why we don't choose chinese thing. 
>>> It improves one's mental if cost is the best thing for something. Why don't we choose Chinese products.
something that chinese make are very cheap beacause of many workers.
>>> Chinese make cheap products. 
But we can't use chinese things even if hate.
>>> But, I hate Chinese products.
 Because they are low quality.
>>> CORRECT~!^^
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