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We need break away trom social media.

SNS seems to be connected each other, But in reality our life disconnect owing to sns.

It causes more negative effects to us especially young gengration.

It is making us dopamine addict.

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Good day, Ms. Lily!
I would have to agree with you. Social media creates a gap between people that the other person has a higher status. 
Thank you for this1
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We need break away trom social media.
>>> We need to get away from social media.

SNS seems to be connected each other, But in reality our life disconnect owing to sns.
>>>SNS seems to connect people, but in reality, our life disconnects owing to SNS.

It causes more negative effects to us especially young gengration.
>>> It causes more negative effects on us, especially the young generation.

It is making us dopamine addict.
>>> It is making us addicted to dopamine.
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