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I think cell phone can bring people farther apart. Because if people watch cell phone they only watch cell phone much time. Cell phone makes people want to watch cell phone keep.

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Hello, Henry!
I see your point there. Cell phones can sometimes create distance between people. When we're glued to our screens, it can distract us from connecting with those around us. It's important to find a balance and prioritize real-life interactions for stronger connections.
~ Teacher Maxine 

I think cell phone can bring people farther apart. 
>> I think cell phones can bring people farther apart.

Because if people watch cell phone they only watch cell phone much time. 
>> Because when people focus on their phones, they end up spending a lot of time solely on the device.

Cell phone makes people want to watch cell phone keep.
>> Cell phones often encourage people to keep watching them.
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