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The best vacation with my friends

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Right before the pandemic started to spread, my 7 friends came to my second house in Heongseong, Gangwon-do.My friends stayed for one night and two full days. They liked our house out of red clay and especially loved the traditional ondol system. They were lying on the heated floor to relax their bodies. At night we enjoyed drinking and chatting. Next morning we hiked a mountain near my house. They still remember that vacation and miss the food during that time. Especially they miss potatoe pancakes and rice cakes out of potatoes.

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Hi, Gi Yean!
Thank you for sharing your story! It was nice to know that your best vacation with your friends happened at your second house. You must be feeling proud and satisfied as well that your friends enjoyed their stay there. I guess you were a great host to them, and your warmth made their stay more enjoyable and unforgettable.
- T. Caitlyn! 
Right before the pandemic started to spread, my 7 friends came to my second house in Heongseong, Gangwon-do.
>> CORRECT
My friends stayed for one night and two full days. 
>> CORRECT 
They liked our house out of red clay and especially loved the traditional ondol system. 
>> They liked our house made out of red clay and especially loved the traditional ondol heating system.
They were lying on the heated floor to relax their bodies. 
>> CORRECT 
At night we enjoyed drinking and chatting. 
>> CORRECT 
Next morning we hiked a mountain near my house. 
>> CORRECT 
They still remember that vacation and miss the food during that time. 
>> CORRECT 
Especially they miss potatoe pancakes and rice cakes out of potatoes.
>> Especially, they miss potato pancakes and rice cakes made out of potatoes.
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