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Hi Kristine,
It is raining all day but not much.
I went to skiing on Friday early morning. we arrived at the ski resort in Kwangwon-do provice around 1pm. There was a lot of snow. It was definitely good for skiing. we spent one night in the resort. we visited a well known old market near the ski resort after checking out from resort. There were various foods in the market. Many small stores were selling delicious foods. we tried to eat deep fried pancake, squid sausage, deep fried chicken and hot soup noodle. It was so nice trip.
HOMEWORK FOR 01/18:
Writing Task: In what ways has music impacted your life?
When I was young I listened music through radio a lot. I sent letter to radio DJ and asked song what i wanted to listen .
Those time I listened American pop song . As I have gotten older , my music range has became wide. There is Jazz, Rege and Hip-pop. I think we all grown up with various music that they listened. Therefore music sometimes becomes my friend whenever I feel happy or

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Good morning, Dongeun! 

Thanks for sharing your insights and stories. See you in class!

- Kristine ^^

Hi Kristine,
It is raining all day but not much.
>> It is raining all day, but not much.
I went to skiing on Friday early morning. 
>> I went skiing on Friday morning. 
we arrived at the ski resort in Kwangwon-do provice around 1pm. 
>> We arrived at the ski resort in Kwangwon-do Province around 1 p.m.
There was a lot of snow. 
>> Correct.
It was definitely good for skiing. 
>> It was definitely a good day for skiing.
we spent one night in the resort. 
>> We spent one night at the resort. 
we visited a well known old market near the ski resort after checking out from resort. 
>> We visited a well-known old market near the ski resort after checking out of the resort.
There were various foods in the market. 
>> Correct.
Many small stores were selling delicious foods. 
>> Correct.
we tried to eat deep fried pancake, squid sausage, deep fried chicken and hot soup noodle. 
>> We tried to eat deep-fried pancakes, squid sausage, deep-fried chicken, and hot soup noodles.
It was so nice trip.
>> It was a wonderful trip.

HOMEWORK FOR 01/18:
Writing Task: In what ways has music impacted your life?

When I was young I listened music through radio a lot. 
>> When I was young, I listened to music on the radio a lot.
I sent letter to radio DJ and asked song what i wanted to listen .
>> I sent a letter to a radio DJ and asked what song I wanted to listen to.
Those time I listened American pop song . 
>> Those times, I listened to American pop songs.
As I have gotten older , my music range has became wide. 
>> As I have gotten older, my music range has become wider.
There is Jazz, Rege and Hip-pop. 
>> There is jazz, reggae, and hip-pop.
I think we all grown up with various music that they listened. 
>> I think we all grew up with various music that we listened to.
Therefore music sometimes becomes my friend whenever I feel happy or
>> Therefore, music sometimes becomes my friend whenever I feel happy.
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