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What would you say is the best thing about New York?
I think the various or difference , dream and anologue.
First, There are a lot of people in New York. But,
They are different earch other. and they admit
the Difference. We general don't understanding about the difference. The difference is the various of our life.
Second, thease day, every people don't dream.
Because, It is hard now.and now is materialistic
Society. but, many people believe the other dream.
Third, They are living as anologue style.many people like anologue style. They likes watch newspaper or talking about daily life more than
Watch Handpone or internet.

I believe it is important more mental life than phygical life. We have to try about change of our life.

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Thank you for this Sir Ko!

I think the various or difference , dream and anologue.
>>> I think the variety or differences, dream and analogue.   
First, There are a lot of people in New York. 
>>> correct 
But, They are different earch other. and they admit the Difference. 
>>>  But, they are different from each other and they acknowledge the differences. 
We general don't understanding about the difference. 
>>> We generally don't understanding the differences.   
The difference is the various of our life.
>>>  The difference is the diversity of our lives.
Second, thease day, every people don't dream. 
Because, It is hard now .and now is materialistic Society.
>>> Second, these days, every person don't dream because life is hard now and we are in a materialistic society.
 but, many people believe the other dream.
>>> However, many people believe in other's dream.  
Third, They are living as anologue style.
>>> Third, they are living in an analogue lifestyle.  
Many people like analogue style. 
>>> correct  
They likes watch newspaper or talking about daily life more than Watch Handpone or internet.
>>>  They like reading newspaper or talking about daily life more than watching hand phone or internet.
I believe it is important more mental life than phygical life. 
>>>  I believe it is more important to enrich mental life than physical life.
We have to try about change of our life.
>>>  We have to try to change of our lifestyle.
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