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~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
Does your city have a good public transportation system? What could be improved about it?

I think the public transportation system in South Korea is good.
Because, it's cheaper compared to other countries.
But, there are many things that need to be improved.
Typical there are big time gap between buses and subway.
Most public transportation we can use every 10 to 15 minutes.
However, many people think this is also slow.
Because, public transportation is ridiculously crowed when people used it a lot, such as during the rush hour.
These things very stressful when I use public transportation.
So I think there are now system is good, but a lot of thing need to be improved.

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Hi, Keon!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Camille


~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
Does your city have a good public transportation system? What could be improved about it?


I think the public transportation system in South Korea is good.
>> CORRECT!
Because, it's cheaper compared to other countries.
>> CORRECT!
But, there are many things that need to be improved.
>> CORRECT!
Typical there are big time gap between buses and subway.
>> Typicallythere are big time gaps between buses and subway.
Most public transportation we can use every 10 to 15 minutes.
>> Most public transportations can be used every 10 to 15 minutes.
However, many people think this is also slow.
>> CORRECT!
Because, public transportation is ridiculously crowed when people used it a lot, such as during the rush hour.
>> Because, public transportations are ridiculously crowded when people use it a lot, especially during the rush hour.
These things very stressful when I use public transportation.
>> These things are very stressful for me whenever I use the public transportation.
So I think there are now system is good, but a lot of thing need to be improved.
>> So I think our system now is good, but a lot of things need to be improved.

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