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I'd rather choose an existing restaurant than a new one.
I tend to be afraid of taking on new challenges.
I will choose the restaurant I originally went to, because I can fail if I try something new.

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Hi Julia! Great job on completing your homework! Keep up the good work!
Your sentences are already grammatically correct, but if you want to make them smoother, you might consider the following revisions. I hope this helps.
Sincerely,
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I'd rather choose an existing restaurant than a new one.
>>> I would rather choose an established restaurant than a new one.
I tend to be afraid of taking on new challenges.
>>> I tend to be apprehensive about taking on new challenges.
I will choose the restaurant I originally went to, because I can fail if I try something new.
>>> I will opt for the restaurant I initially went to because I might fail if I try something new.
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