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I enjoy shopping not only for buying items needed but also for sharing opinions and emotions about the items with people.
I'm really interested in conveying my opinions and recommending a better options to someone.
Of course, it is hard to look around in store quite a long time.
Then, I often require my companion for giving me sweet desserts.
Although I sometimes make a mistake to buy unexpected items, shopping is definetely entertaining content for me.

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Hi, Ms. Yu Jin! Well, it's true that looking around shops is exhausting and sometimes, while we browse around, we sometimes impulse buy. Nevertheless, if shopping is our cup of tea, we still can enjoy it. Thank you for sparing some time to write this composition. ^^
~T. Jenna

I enjoy shopping not only for buying items needed but also for sharing opinions and emotions about the items with people.
>>I enjoy shopping, not just for buying needed items, but also for sharing opinions and emotions about them with people.
I'm really interested in conveying my opinions and recommending a better options to someone.
>>I'm really interested in conveying my opinions and recommending better options to someone.
Of course, it is hard to look around in store quite a long time.
>>Of course, it is hard to look around stores for quite a long time.
Then, I often require my companion for giving me sweet desserts.
>> So, I often require my companion to give me sweets. 
Although I sometimes make a mistake to buy unexpected items, shopping is definetely entertaining content for me.
>>Although I sometimes make a mistake of buying unexpected items, shopping is definitely entertaining for me. or Occasionally, I get swayed into buying unnecessary things, but shopping is definitely entertaining for me.
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