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Our country dosen¡¯t have farming industry for escape poverty.
We aid some cash and have a kind of benefits related in tax.
Their hospital fee is almost 80% cheaper than other people.
They can live small apartment by cheaply.
But the problem is , The standard of poor people is not accurate.

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Hello again, Ms. Sunny!
¡°Give a man a fish, and you feed him for a day; teach a man to fish and you feed him for a lifetime.¡± This proverb denotes that, It's good to let them do things by themselves so that they will learn the way to do it well. Cash subsidies and aid are good but some people become too dependent on it and they just wait for the government to provide for them. Have a good day!
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Our country dosen¡¯t have farming industry for escape poverty.
>>> Our country doesn¡¯t have a farming industry to escape poverty.

We aid some cash and have a kind of benefits related in tax.
>>> We aid some cash and have a kind of benefits related to tax.

Their hospital fee is almost 80% cheaper than other people.
>>> CORRECT!

They can live small apartment by cheaply.
>>> They can live in small apartments cheaply.

But the problem is , The standard of poor people is not accurate.
>>> But the problem ithe standard of poor people is not accurate.
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