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The reason why some people have lots of energy while others have little energy

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I think reason why some people have lots of energy while others have little energy is because people's personalities are different.
Some people need their own time for rest after play with friends or work.
That's my type.
While others want to be with people after work.
However, it's not always a person have little energy need a rest time.
Most people do that.
Thus, each person's personalities and energy are all different each others.

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Hi Julie!
Take note of the correct term used.
The verbs have to match the correct tenses.
Be careful with your choice of words. ^^
~~ Teacher Sharon
I think reason why some people have lots of energy while others have little energy is because people's personalities are different.
>> I think the reason why some people have lots of energy while others have little energy is because people's personalities are different.
Some people need their own time for rest after play with friends or work.
>> Some people need their own time for rest after playing with friends or working.
That's my type.
>> That's how I am.
While others want to be with people after work.
>> Others want to be with people after work.
However, it's not always a person have little energy need a rest time.
>> However, there are people who have little energy and need rest time.
Most people do that.
>> Correct
Thus, each person's personalities and energy are all different each others.
>> Thus, people's personalities and energy are all different from each other.
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