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I think cosmetics are not waiste of money.
It makes help their skin healthy and protective.
It is naturall performance and special present for only woman to put on their make up.
Women are always trying to maintain their appearance properly.
Because they could be more pretty and have confidence.

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Great day,  Ms. Sunny!
I agree with you since cosmetics enhance one's beauty and boost the confidence of people. The only thing we need to consider is spending too much on cosmetics does not only endanger the environment but your "wallet" a well.
 Enjoy the day!
T. Aki~

I think cosmetics are not waiste of money.
>>> I think cosmetics are not waste of money.

It makes help their skin healthy and protective.
>>> It helps keep their skin healthy and protective.

It is naturall performance and special present for only woman to put on their make up.
>>> It is natural performance and a special present for only woman to put on their make-up.

Women are always trying to maintain their appearance properly.
>>> CORRECT!

Because they could be more pretty and have confidence.
>>> Because they could be prettier and have more confidence.

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