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~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
What are some fun things to do when visiting a new city?


When I go to travel, I like to go to the new areas.
This is because each city and each country has different characteristics.
I will compare to Japan, this country close to Korea.
I had mistaken when I first went to Japan.
There is close to Korea, so I thought the lifestyle will be similar.
But I was mistaken.
For example, Basically in South Korea, we are right-hand traffic when we walk or drive a car.
On the other hand, Japan is left-hand traffic.
And I was also surprised about the their believed in religion.
South Korean people believe in various religions such as Christianity, Catholicism, and Buddhism.
However, most Japanese people believe in Japanese national religion or Buddhism.
To sum it up, when I go to new area it's interesting to compare the differences with our country.

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Hi, Keon!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Camille

~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
What are some fun things to do when visiting a new city?



When I go to travel, I like to go to the new areas.
>> When I go on a trip, I like to go to new areas.
OR >> When I travel, I like to go to new areas.
This is because each city and each country has different characteristics.
>> CORRECT!
I will compare to Japan, this country close to Korea.
>> I will compare Japan to my country, because this country is the closest.
I had mistaken when I first went to Japan.
>> I was mistaken when I first went to Japan.
There is close to Korea, so I thought the lifestyle will be similar.
>> Japan is close to Korea, so I thought the lifestyle would be similar.
But I was mistaken.
>> CORRECT!
For example, Basically in South Korea, we are right-hand traffic when we walk or drive a car.
>> For example, basically in South Korea, it is a right-hand traffic when we walk or drive a car.
On the other hand, Japan is left-hand traffic.
>> CORRECT!
And I was also surprised about the their believed in religion.
>> And I was also surprised about the their religious beliefs.
South Korean people believe in various religions such as Christianity, Catholicism, and Buddhism.
>> CORRECT!
However, most Japanese people believe in Japanese national religion or Buddhism.
>> CORRECT!
To sum it up, when I go to new area it's interesting to compare the differences with our country.
>> CORRECT!

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