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ESSAY: Nowadays, more and more people from different cities are spending more time away from their families. What are the possible reasons and the effects on the people themselves and their families?

Being away from your family will have a lot of negative effects.
The further you go, the smaller your love.
Also, I don't think it's good for emotional development if you have children.
In order for your family to have a better influence, you have to be close and love more time. I think so.

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Good morning Lee! TGIF! Any plans for the weekend? I hope you'll have a good one! Anyway, keep up doing your homework! Improve little by little. See you!
>>> TEACHER GEMMA
Being away from your family will have a lot of negative effects.
>>> CORRECT~!^^
The further you go, the smaller your love.
>>> The farther you go, the lesser your love.
Also, I don't think it's good for emotional development if you have children.
>>> Also, I don't think it's good for emotional development for children.
In order for your family to have a better influence, you have to be close and love more time. I think so.
>>> I think in order for your family to have a better influence, you have to be closed and loving. 
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