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How important do you think is passion in doing something?
I think. It is important that i have a passionin my life.
If you dreaming about new something, you have to do a challenge in your life.
Our Passion gave new things to me.
for example. dream,hope, destiny, my life.
The Passionist can do something and can do chalkenge. The Passion is power and challenge
It open the door through your destiny.
And then, it is important to have the passion.
Also, the passion is destiny. It is a gift that God gave to me.

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Thank you for this Sir Ko!

I think. It is important that i have a passionin my life.
>>> I think it is important that I have a passion in my life.  
If you dreaming about new something, you have to do a challenge in your life.
>>>  If you are dreaming about something new, you have to do a challenge in your life.
Our Passion gave new things to me.
>>>  Our passion gives new things to us.
for example. dream,hope, destiny, my life.
>>> For example, dream, hope, and destiny in life.
The Passionist can do something and can do chalkenge. 
>>> The passionate can do something and can take on challenges.  
The Passion is power and challenge
>>> Passion is power and courage.
It open the door through your destiny.
>>>  It opens the door through your destiny.
And then, it is important to have the passion.
>>> correct 
Also, the passion is destiny. 
>>> Also, passion is a destiny.  
It is a gift that God gave to me.
>>>  correct
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