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As time goes by
Most of partners became indifferent each other.
When they get along , their hearts don¡¯t racing
in addition they could argue if they talk together over 10minute.
Such as my situation like this.
We want to racing our heart.
We need to someone who can listen to me.

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Good morning, Ms. Sunny!
Thank you for sharing this. I guess as couples get older, they become more impatient toward each other. They no longer feel excited about each other's presence because they got used to it, they no longer treat each other as lovers but as family, I remember one person saying that he no longer hugs his wife because they are family. It made me laugh. We have a different culture.
Have a good day!
T. Aki~

I suggest you write your sentence this way. 

As time goes by most of partners became indifferent each other.
>>> As time went by most of the partners became indifferent to each other.

When they get along , their hearts don¡¯t racing
>>> When they get along, they seem not to be excited.

in addition they could argue if they talk together over 10minute.
>>> In addition they could argue if they talked together for over 10 minutes.

Such as my situation like this.
>>> Such a situation is like mine.

We want to racing our heart.
>>> We hope that there is excitement in our hearts.

We need to someone who can listen to me.
>>> We need someone who can listen to us.
>>> I need someone who can listen to me.
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