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~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
Do you prefer to drive or travel by another form of transport?

Yes, I think car is more comfortable than other transport.
Because when I go to company or going to travel it's more comfortably go to the destination.
And generally, it saves time.
On the other hand, the downside of car is that it cost more expensive than public transportation.
We have to get gas for car, pay for parking fee, and pay toll fee.
Even, we have to pay taxes of car and pay to insurance.
Nevertheless, car is also comfortable items.
Instead, we should always be careful everything when driving.

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Hi, Keon!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Camille

~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
Do you prefer to drive or travel by another form of transport?


Yes, I think car is more comfortable than other transport.
>> Yes, I think a car is more comfortable than other forms of transport.
Because when I go to company or going to travel it's more comfortably go to the destination.
>> It's because when I go to the company or travel, it's more comfortable to go to the destination.
And generally, it saves time.
>> CORRECT!
On the other hand, the downside of car is that it cost more expensive than public transportation.
>> On the other hand, the downside of owning a car is that it costs more than public transportation.
We have to get gas for car, pay for parking fee, and pay toll fee.
>> We have to get gas for the car in full tank, pay for parking fees, and pay toll fees.
Even, we have to pay taxes of car and pay to insurance.
>>  We even have to pay taxes for the car and pay insurance.
Nevertheless, car is also comfortable items.
>> Nevertheless, a car is also a comfortable item.
Instead, we should always be careful everything when driving.
>> Instead, we should always be careful every time we drive.

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