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My favorite dessert

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I usually like to eat Ramen at home for dessert.
However, some restaurants don't offer that dessert.
So, I like to order cakes, cookies and breads in restaurants for appetizer or dessert.
Also, my favorite dessert is Plum tea.
Most Korean people would know that.
Plum tea is usually offer in meat restaurants.
It is a digestible food, so it helps me digestion well.
What is your favorite appetizer or dessert?

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Hi Julie!
This is such an improvement.
I hope you continue doing a good job.
Take note of the proper use of capitalization as well.^^
~~ Teacher Sharon
I usually like to eat Ramen at home for dessert.
>> I usually like to eat ramen for dessert at home.
However, some restaurants don't offer that dessert.
>> Correct
So, I like to order cakes, cookies and breads in restaurants for appetizer or dessert.
>> So, I like to order cake, cookies and bread in restaurants as an appetizer or dessert.
Also, my favorite dessert is Plum tea.
>> Also, my favorite dessert is plum tea.
Most Korean people would know that.
>> Correct
Plum tea is usually offer in meat restaurants.
>> Plum tea is usually offered in meat restaurants.
It is a digestible food, so it helps me digestion well.
>> It is a digestible food, so it helps us in digestion.
What is your favorite appetizer or dessert?
>> Correct
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