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The importance of working out

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2024-01-08 1839

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The reason why I continue working out is some visible effects that I can check fastly.
Of course, It is really hassle to go to gym while I give up doing other hobbies at the same time.
However, after finishing a one hours of working out, I always feel fresh and get proud by myself.
Additionally, my physical and mental condition will be definetely improved by sleeping well.
The older we are, the more we need to work out because of our basic strength.

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Hi Yu Jin! I totally agree! Working out becomes even more important as we age. I love your dedication to staying fit – it's truly inspiring! Keep it up! 
~~T. Jenna

The reason why I continue working out is some visible effects that I can check fastly.
>>The reason why I continue working out is some visible effects that I can check quickly. 
or
>>What motivates me to keep working out are the tangible results I get.
Of course, It is really hassle to go to gym while I give up doing other hobbies at the same time.
>>Of course, it is really a hassle to go to the gym while I give up doing other hobbies at the same time.
However, after finishing a one hours of working out, I always feel fresh and get proud by myself.
>>However, after finishing a one-hour workout, I always feel fresh and get proud of myself.
Additionally, my physical and mental condition will be definetely improved by sleeping well.
>>Additionally, my physical and mental condition will definitely be improved by sleeping well.
The older we are, the more we need to work out because of our basic strength.
Correct, or
>>The older we become, the more we need to work out to maintain our basic strength.
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