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Hello, I'm Ryan. today i will tell you `Our senses are important. How can we take good care of our senses?`
First, how to take good care of your vision is to relieve eye fatigue and look far away.
The second way to take good care of your sense of smell is not to pick your nose.
The third way to take good care of your touch is not to touch too hot or cold objects.
The fourth way to take good care of your hearing is to be careful not to scream or listen too loud.
Lastly, a good way to take care of your taste buds is not to eat too much hot or cold objects.

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Thank you for this Ryan!

Hello, I'm Ryan. 
>>> correct
today i will tell you `Our senses are important. How can we take good care of our senses?`
>>> Today, I will tell you why 'Our senses are important and how can we take good care of our senses?`
First, how to take good care of your vision is to relieve eye fatigue and look far away.
>>> correct
The second way to take good care of your sense of smell is not to pick your nose.
>>> correct
>>> OR: The second way to take good care of your sense of smell is to not pick your nose aggressively.
The third way to take good care of your touch is not to touch too hot or cold objects.
>>> OR: The third way to take good care of your sense of touch is not to touch too hot or cold objects.
The fourth way to take good care of your hearing is to be careful not to scream or listen too loud.
>>> The fourth way to take good care of your hearing is to be careful not to scream or listen to sounds that are too loud.
Lastly, a good way to take care of your taste buds is not to eat too much hot or cold objects.
>>Lastly, a good way to take care of your taste buds is to not eat anything that is too hot or too cold.
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