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ESSAY: Some people believe that teenagers should be required to do unpaid community work in their free time. This can benefit teenagers and the community as well. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

I agree that unpaid community activities are volunteer activities.
Adolescent students need a lot of volunteer work. Through it, you can know how to help people and learn how to cooperate with the community.
However, if that is not the case, I don't think there is a need to do community activities without pay. Students should do more valuable activities than those activities. It is more important for them to study and exercise.

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Hi there Lee. Thanks for always doing your homework! ^^ I appreciate your diligence! Keep it up and enjoy learning!
>>> TEACHER GEMMA
I agree that unpaid community activities are volunteer activities.
>>> CORRECT~!^^
Adolescent students need a lot of volunteer work.
>>> CORRECT~!^^
 Through it, you can know how to help people and learn how to cooperate with the community.
>>> CORRECT~!^^
However, if that is not the case, I don't think there is a need to do community activities without pay.
>>> CORRECT~!^^
 Students should do more valuable activities than those activities.
>>> CORRECT~!^^
 It is more important for them to study and exercise.
>>> CORRECT~!^^
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