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What is the most challenging part of your business ?
maybe, I think the two parts.
First part is challenge about English.
Second parts is challenge about Environmental.

It is very hard that to study English.
But, it's quite interesting and fun. It's more
difficult listing than speaking.and than, i'm trying to learn English countinue.
A lot of people doesn't know well about Environmental problem.
But, this problem is biggest our homework.and
It is my destiny in my life.

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Thank you for this Sir Ko!

maybe, I think the two parts.
>>  Maybe, I think there are two parts.
First part is challenge about English.
>> The first part is the challenge in speaking English. 
Second parts is challenge about Environmental.
>> The second parts is the challenge with the environmental.
It is very hard that to study English.
>>  It is very hard to study English.
But, it's quite interesting and fun. 
>>  correct
It's more difficult listing than speaking.and than, i'm trying to learn English countinue.
>> It's more difficult listening than speaking. Because of that, I'm trying to learn English continuously. 
A lot of people doesn't know well about Environmental problem.
>> A lot of people don't know well about the Environmental problem. 
But, this problem is biggest our homework. 
>>  But, this problem is biggest than our homework. 
It is my destiny in my life.
>>  OR: It is my destiny in life.
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