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Celebrities have to take care of their behavior.
Because citizens watch them everywhere.
If they behave badly or illegally
like cheating,gambling and drugging.
They could be more criticized better than general people.
People consider celebrity have to be leader among the citizens.

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Good morning, Ms. Sunny!
Everyone has flaws and imperfections. However, people whose life is surrounded by cameras need to guard their actions and behaviors. We understand that like us they are also human beings but the fact that they influence many lives of people with high expectations is a demand from them.
Have a great day!
T. Aki~

Celebrities have to take care of their behavior. 
>>> CORRECT!
OR >> Celebrities have to maintain their good image.

Because citizens watch them everywhere.
>>> CORRECT!

If they behave badly or illegally like cheating,gambling and drugging.
>>> If they behave badly or illegally like cheating, gambling and taking drugs.

They could be more criticized better than general people.
>>> They will be criticized more than the common people.

People consider celebrity have to be leader among the citizens.
>>> People consider celebrities as good leaders among the citizens.
>>> People consider celebrities as good influence among the citizens.
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