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My greetings to my family and friends

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First, after I wake up in the morning, I always say "Good morning!" to my mother, father, and my grandmother.
Also I always ask grandmother her body conditions. Because she is 91 years old in this year.

And I always say "Good morning, cuties!" to my friendly coworkers.
"The cutie" is the group of my coworkers. There are four members in this group including me.
We were hired at the same time, and we worked in same office about 1 years.
We got close each other while chatting at worktime.
I can't remember why we call ourselves "The cuties", but now we are used to calling like that.

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Well done, Min! You did well in writing. ^^ I have corrected a few words on your answers. Thank you for sharing how you greet your family and friends. 
-Khai
First, after I wake up in the morning, I always say "Good morning!" to my mother, father, and my grandmother.

>> CORRECT

OR

>> First, after I wake up in the morning, I always say "Good morning!" to my family.

Also I always ask grandmother her body conditions. Because she is 91 years old in this year.

>> Also, I always ask my grandmother about her body conditions because she is turning 91 years old this year.

And I always say "Good morning, cuties!" to my friendly coworkers.

>> And I always say, "Good morning, cuties!" to my friendly coworkers.

"The cutie" is the group of my coworkers. There are four members in this group including me.

>> CORRECT

OR
>> "The cutie" is how we call our group. There are four members in this group including me.
We were hired at the same time, and we worked in same office about 1 years.

>> We were hired at the same time, and we worked in the same office for about 1 year.

We got close each other while chatting at worktime.

>> We got close to each other while chatting at work.

I can't remember why we call ourselves "The cuties", but now we are used to calling like that.

>> I can't remember why we call ourselves "The cuties", but now we are used to calling it like that.


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