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~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
What is the best job in your country?

There are many jobs in the world.
Of course, my country also to has many jobs that many people wanna be.
These days, many people prefer professional jobs.
In a similar means, when Korean people doing conversations, professional jobs expressed as "SA(ȍ)" jobs.
This means is a job in which the word "SA" is included in the name of the jobs.
For examples, these kinds of jobs such as doctor, lawyers like a practitioner.
The reason why many people want be a professional job because of a stable life.
If professional worker have many experience, they has a higher salary and a more socially stable position.
So, many people want a professional job.

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Hi, Keon!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Camille


~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
What is the best job in your country?


There are many jobs in the world.
>> CORRECT!
Of course, my country also to has many jobs that many people wanna be.
>> Of course, my country also has many jobs that many people want to have.
These days, many people prefer professional jobs.
>> CORRECT!
In a similar means, when Korean people doing conversations, professional jobs expressed as "SA(ȍ)" jobs.
>> In a similar meaning, when Korean people do conversations, professional jobs are expressed as "SA(»ç)" jobs.
This means is a job in which the word "SA" is included in the name of the jobs.
>> This means the word "SA" is included in the name of the jobs.
For examples, these kinds of jobs such as doctor, lawyers like a practitioner.
>> For example, these kinds of jobs are doctors, lawyers, and practitioners.
The reason why many people want be a professional job because of a stable life.
>> The reason why many people want a professional job is because they aim for a stable life.
If professional worker have many experience, they has a higher salary and a more socially stable position.
>> If a professional worker has many experiences, he or she has a higher salary and a more socially stable position.
So, many people want a professional job.
>> CORRECT!

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