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I want to achieve number 4 out of them

My goal is to reduce my golf handicap from 90 to 80.

Additionally, my goal for this year is to reduce something with less consumption, lose weight, drinking less and reduces stress.

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Hi Sir Gwon!^^ 

All of them are hard to achieve. haha 
I need to follow number 3. 
I have to organize my things and life too. 

Andrea 

I want to achieve number 4 out of them
>> Among all of them, I want to achieve number 4. 

My goal is to reduce my golf handicap from 90 to 80
.
>> Correct 

Additionally, my goal for this year is to reduce something with less consumption, lose weight, drinking less and reduces stress.
>> Correct 


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