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Is technology making people smarter or dumber?

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I think, technology makes people dumber.
cause technology make us easy and got a much answer when we find information or something whatever we awnt. and can comfortable and increase our life.
But, it means it make us little dumber.
we don¡¯t need to think and learn something. so, our body is more slow and brain is stop even make us idiot.
So, sometimes I am a little bit scary about develop of technology.
I think, people is useful and healthful while we moving and thinking for myself.

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Hi, Hari!
I appreciate you writing this composition. You did a good job of supporting your response, I must say. I agree with your viewpoints. In my opinion, without technology, life seemed to move more slowly, and people were even more productive because of their diligence and hard work. I have to admit, then, that those who lived without technology were more mature for their age because they go through the process. 
-Chammy
I think technology makes people dumber.
>>Correct
cause technology make us easy and got a much answer when we find information or something whatever we awnt. and can comfortable and increase our life.
>>Because technology makes it easy and gives a lot of answers when we find information or something whatever we want. And can be comfortable and increase our life (or our productivity).
But, it means it make us little dumber.
>>But, it means it makes us a little dumber.
we don¡¯t need to think and learn something. so, our body is more slow and brain is stop even make us idiot.
>>We don¡¯t need to think and learn something so, our body is slower and our brain stops even making us idiots.
So, sometimes I am a little bit scary about develop of technology.
>>So, sometimes I am a little bit scared about the development of technology.
I think, people is useful and healthful while we moving and thinking for myself.
>>I think, people are useful and healthful when we move and think for ourselves.
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