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~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
How would you feel if there weren¡¯t any holidays?

If I don't have a day off or a holidays, I will be desperate.
If I'm an office worker and these company don't have a day off, I'll quit my job.
I think the holidays just for me or recharge my energy through my rest day.
That's how it the day off is important for me.
But, reality is not easy and I can't do that everything I want.
Because already many workers work on their holidays.
Maybe many people already know well, the reason is we have to make money.
The money is not everything in our life, but it is essential in life.
So even if I want to rest, but it's not easy to rest.
Nevertheless, I don't want to live like a slave of money.

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Hi, Keon!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Camille


~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
How would you feel if there weren¡¯t any holidays?


If I don't have a day off or a holidays, I will be desperate.
>> If I don't have a day off or any holidays, I will be desperate.
If I'm an office worker and these company don't have a day off, I'll quit my job.
>> If I'm an office worker and the company doesn't have a day off, I'll quit my job.
I think the holidays just for me or recharge my energy through my rest day.
>> I think the holidays are made just for me to recharge my energy through my rest days.
That's how it the day off is important for me.
>> That's how important the day off is for me.
But, reality is not easy and I can't do that everything I want.
>> But, the reality is that it's not easy and I can't do everything I want.
Because already many workers work on their holidays.
>> It's because many workers work on their holidays.
Maybe many people already know well, the reason is we have to make money.
>> CORRECT!
The money is not everything in our life, but it is essential in life.
>> CORRECT!
So even if I want to rest, but it's not easy to rest.
>> So even if I want to rest, it's not easy.
Nevertheless, I don't want to live like a slave of money.
>> Nevertheless, I don't want to live like a slave for money.

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