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Hi. T.Donna.
The trend of the profit is good these days, it seems to be recovered around 90% in comparison to past months before the crisis.
Dr.MJ and I feel so happy for this.
Since my wife gave me the food which she cooked directly, we really enjoyed our lunch.
She is good at cook.
She doesn't cook frequently though.
Today, a marketing manager passed me sentences which will be posted on our online homepage.
It was awkward, I think.
I want you to correct the sentences this time as before.
I will send you on the Skype chat.
There is no more news about the crazy woman named Park.
She may have given up the excessive request.
We suggested that we could improve her scar for free, but she rejected it.
From the first time, she told us that she wanted a money, nothing else.
There's been many patients who wanted to improve their scar after other clinic's laser.
They paid for the treatment with their money, because the scar after removal of mole or mass is usual.
So, I can't accept her request.

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Good evening, Dr. Kim!

I have sent back the online post you have requested me to revise. I hope it will help you to be more confident and more successful for your clinic. If you earn a lot, I will charge you for my editing skills. ^^ I am kidding.

The profit trend is impressive lately. I hope that everyone upholds quality standard of service above all. Sometimes, thinking about the profit should be the secondary concern you should have. Primarily, quality service and client satisfaction ought to be on top of your list. Nothing beats an excellent service and genuine concern for your patients. This way, revenue will continuously flow like the Han River in your clinic. In addition, unhappy patients or clients will disappear and never disturb you.

Then, carry on in your clinic! Congratulations.

Below, there are word forms that you need to master especially when the word needs transformation from a very to noun. If you read and edit your sentences before submission, you might be able to determine your own errors and your composition will be free from corrections. Nevertheless, you did so well in telling your story in logical order and degree of importance. 

See you again tomorrow. 

-T. Donna~

Hi. T.Donna.
>> Hi, T. Donna.

The trend of the profit is good these days, it seems to be recovered around 90% in comparison to past months before the crisis.
>>The trend of the profit is good these days, it seems to be recovering around 90% in comparison to past months before the crisis.

Dr.MJ and I feel so happy for this.
>> Correct!

Since my wife gave me the food which she cooked directly, we really enjoyed our lunch.
>> Correct!

She is good at cook.
>> She is good at cooking.

She doesn't cook frequently though.
>> Correct!

Today, a marketing manager passed me sentences which will be posted on our online homepage.
>> Correct!

It was awkward, I think.
>> Correct!

I want you to correct the sentences this time as before.
>> Correct!

I will send you on the Skype chat.
>> Correct!

There is no more news about the crazy woman named Park.
>> Correct!

She may have given up the excessive request.
>> Correct!

We suggested that we could improve her scar for free, but she rejected it.
>> Correct!

From the first time, she told us that she wanted a money, nothing else.
>> From the first time, she told us that she wanted money and nothing else.

There's been many patients who wanted to improve their scar after other clinic's laser.
>> Correct!

They paid for the treatment with their money, because the scar after removal of mole or mass is usual.
>> Correct!

So, I can't accept her request.
>> Correct!

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