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Today, i went to the part time job, because we had a christmas party.
i didn\'t happy but children\'s looked like happy.
They were saw movie, played board game and ate chicken nuggets.
My body was so hard, but they were looke happy so i was happy too. Mabye ¤¾¤¾
And i arrived at home ate tteokbokki and i deliveried it.
After ate tteokobokki i layed on the bed and watched youtube and Football!!
so today was not bad day !

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Hello there Anna~!^^ So you have started writing your diary? That's a good decision to improve your English skills! Enjoy learning written and spoken English Anna! Get well soon too!
>>> TEACHER GEMMA
Today, i went to the part time job, because we had a christmas party.
>>> Today, I went to my part time job, because it's our Christmas party.
i didn\'t happy but children\'s looked like happy.
>>> I was not happy but children were. 
They were saw movie, played board game and ate chicken nuggets.
>>> They watched a movie, played board games and ate chicken nuggets.
My body was so hard, but they were looke happy so i was happy too. 
>>> I was exhausted, but seeing them happy, I felt the same too.
Mabye ¤¾¤¾
>>> Maybe...
And i arrived at home ate tteokbokki and i deliveried it.
>>> When I arrived at home, I ate delivered tteokbokki.
After ate tteokobokki i layed on the bed and watched youtube and Football!!

>>> 
After eating tteokobokki I laid on the bed and watched YouTube and Football!!
so today was not bad day !
>>> It was not a bad day!
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