¹«·á ·¹º§Å×½ºÆ® ¹Þ°í °­»çÆò°¡ ³²±â¸é 1,OOO¿ø ÄíÆù Áï½Ã Àû¸³!

Ȥ½Ã »çÀÌÆ®¿¡¼± ãÁö ¸øÇÑ ±Ã±ÝÇÑ Á¡ÀÌ ÀÖÀ¸¼¼¿ä?
³²°ÜÁֽŠÀ̸ÞÀÏÀ» ÅëÇØ ´äº¯ µå¸®°Ú½À´Ï´Ù.

¹®ÀÇÇϽг»¿ëÀÌ ¹®ÀÚ·Î ¹ß¼ÛµÇ¿À´Ï
¿¬¶ôó¸¦ ³²°ÜÁÖ¼¼¿ä.
¾÷¹«½Ã°£ ¿ù~±Ý ¿ÀÀü9½Ã~¿ÀÈÄ6½Ã
(Á¡½É½Ã°£ ³·12½Ã~¿ÀÈÄ1½Ã)

¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ °Ô½ÃÆÇ

¿µ¾î ¸»Çϱâ¿Í ¾²±â¸¦ µ¿½Ã¿¡ Àâ´Â´Ù!

ÀڽŠÀÖ°Ô ¾µ ¼ö ÀÖ´Â ¿µÀÛ¹®À» À§ÇØ ÆÄ¿öÀ×±Û¸®½¬ ¼ö¾÷À» ¼ö°­ÇϽôÂ
ȸ¿ø´Ôµé²² ¹«·á·Î Á¦°øÇص帮´Â ºÎ°¡ ¼­ºñ½º·Î, Àü¹® ºÐ¾ß¸¦ Á¦¿ÜÇÑ ÀÚÀ¯ ÁÖÁ¦
¶Ç´Â °­»ç´ÔÀÌ ³»Áֽô °úÁ¦¸¦ ȸ¿ø´Ô²²¼­ ¿µ¾î·Î ÀÛ¼ºÇØÁֽøé,
´ã´ç °­»ç ´Ô²²¼­ ¡®¹®¹ý ¿À·ù ±³Á¤¡¯ °ú ¡®´õ ³ªÀº ¿µ¾î½Ä Ç¥Çö¡¯À¸·Î ±³Á¤ÇØÁÖ´Â
¼­ºñ½º ÀÔ´Ï´Ù.

BUSAN

ÀÛ¼ºÀÚ: ±Ç*Èñ
2023-12-20 1822

ȸ¿ø´ÔÀÇ ¿µÀÛ¹®

If the youth prefer to Busan, it is a very glad news and signs for us.

In Korea, too many populations dense in the few metro cities serously, itself means the imbalance of country.

Urban imbalances are related to many parts which are industry, housing, employment and infrastructure of life etc.

This make the rich-get-richer and the poor-get-poorer cycle.

°­»ç´ÔÀÇ Ã·»è±³Á¤ ³»¿ë

Ms. Lily!
This is a piece of good news for your country that not all people complain about how difficult life is.
Let's talk about it later. see you!
Aki~

If the youth prefer to Busan, it is a very glad news and signs for us.
>>> If the youth prefer Busan, it is very good news and signs for us.

In Korea, too many populations dense in the few metro cities serously, itself means the imbalance of country.
>>> In Korea, too much population in the few metro cities seriously imbalanced the country.

Urban imbalances are related to many parts which are industry, housing, employment, infrastructure of life, etc.
>>> CORRECT!

This makes the rich-get-richer and the poor-get-poorer cycle.
>>> CORRECT!

¹øÈ£ Á¦¸ñ ±Û¾´ÀÌ °ø°³ »óÅ µî·ÏÀÏ Á¶È¸¼ö
133535 homework ÀÌ*¼÷ ¿Ï·á 2023-12-29 1953
133534 Homework ±è*¼­ ¿Ï·á 2023-12-29 2
133533 This time of year ÀÌ*±Ô ¿Ï·á 2023-12-29 1595
133532 How do you deal with unsolicited advice? ÇÏ*Çö ¿Ï·á 2023-12-29 0
133531 What kind of business do you want to set up? ±Ç*ÀÓ ¿Ï·á 2023-12-29 1
133530 Today\'s homework ÀÌ*µµ ¿Ï·á 2023-12-29 2223
133529 Homework ·ù*¿ì ¿Ï·á 2023-12-29 2361
133528 What cities inyour coutry would you like to visit? ¹Ú*Çö ¿Ï·á 2023-12-29 2020
133527 Homework ±è*¼­ ¿Ï·á 2023-12-29 1
133526 Homework : unit 16 ¹Ú*³ª ¿Ï·á 2023-12-29 3
133525 Do you think working during the holidays affects your overall... ÃÖ*Á¤ ¿Ï·á 2023-12-29 2089
133524 happiness is a choice? ±è*Èñ ¿Ï·á 2023-12-29 1
133523 Homework ±Ç*¹Ì ¿Ï·á 2023-12-29 0
133522 Homework ±Ç*¹Ì ¿Ï·á 2023-12-29 0
133521 Survey ±Ç*Á¤ ¿Ï·á 2023-12-29 1
133520 Letter ¹Ú*ÁØ ¿Ï·á 2023-12-29 1
133519 Homework ±Ç*¹Ì ¿Ï·á 2023-12-29 0
133518 What are the things you want to achieve before the end of this... ÀÌ*Çö ¿Ï·á 2023-12-29 3250
133517 Homework 12/27 ±è*¾Æ ¿Ï·á 2023-12-29 1
133516 homework ±è*¸° ¿Ï·á 2023-12-29 1

HOW TO USE IT?

[¸¶ÀÌÆäÀÌÁö > ¼ö¾÷ ³»¿ë º¸±â > ÇнÀ ͏°´õ > ¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ ¹öư Ŭ¸¯]

¼ö¾÷ Ƚ¼ö¸¸Å­ ¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ °Ô½ÃÆÇÀÌ »ý¼ºµÇ¸ç,
Áö³­ ³¯Â¥¿¡µµ °Ô½Ã ÇÒ ¼ö ÀÖ½À´Ï´Ù.

ÁÖ5ȸ ¼ö¾÷ : ¿ù 20ȸ ÀÌ¿ë °¡´É
ÁÖ3ȸ ¼ö¾÷ : ¿ù 12ȸ ÀÌ¿ë °¡´É
ÁÖ2ȸ ¼ö¾÷ : ¿ù 08ȸ ÀÌ¿ë °¡´É
01
±³Á¤ ³»¿ëÀº ÃÖ´ë 1,000byte±îÁö ¿Ã¸± ¼ö ÀÖ½À´Ï´Ù.

÷ºÎ ÆÄÀÏÀº ¿øÈ°ÇÑ Ã·»èÀ» À§ÇÑ Âü°íÀÚ·á·Î »ç¿ëµÉ »Ó,
ÆÄÀÏ¿¡ ´ëÇÑ Ã·»èÀº ºÒ°¡´É ÇÕ´Ï´Ù.

¾÷·Îµå °¡´ÉÇÑ Ã·ºÎ ÆÄÀÏÀº ÃÖ´ë 2mb±îÁöÀ̸ç,
÷ºÎ ÇÒ ¼ö ÀÖ´Â ÆÄÀÏ Çü½ÄÀº ´ÙÀ½°ú °°½À´Ï´Ù.

¹®¼­ - PDF, TXT, DOCX,
À̹ÌÁö - JPEG, PNG, GIF
02
Àü¹® ºÐ¾ß¸¦ Á¦¿ÜÇÑ È¸¿ø´ÔÀÌ Á÷Á¢ ÀÛ¼ºÇÑ ±Û¸¸
÷»èÀÌ °¡´ÉÇϸç,

¿Ã·ÁÁֽбÛÀÇ °­»ç´Ô ÷»èÀº 24½Ã°£ À̳»¿¡
¿Ï·á µÇ´Â °ÍÀ» ¿øÄ¢À¸·Î Çϰí ÀÖ½À´Ï´Ù.
03
ÇÏ·ç °Ô½Ã °¡´ÉÇÑ ±ÛÀº 3ȸ±îÁö À̸ç,
Á¾·áµÈ ¼ö¾÷ÀÇ ¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ °Ô½ÃÆÇÀº
ÀÌ¿ëÀÌ ¾î·Á¿î Á¡ ¾çÇØ ºÎŹ µå¸³´Ï´Ù.
04