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Hi, T.Donna.
Congratulations to your son's birthday.
What kind of meal did you eat with your son?
Today, I was somewhat satisfied with the profit and the number of patients in the clinic.
There was one patient who was so worried about the result of his skin tissue examination, because his lesion was not typical and became large quickly.
In fact, I diagnosed skin cancer many times, so I can distinguish with my eyes basically if the lesion is malignant or not.
However, his protruding mass didn't look typical benign appearance, so I couldn't comfort him naturally.
This afternoon, I got the result from the institution of tissue examination, and it proved to be benign.
Thus, I called him immediately and told him about it, and then, I could feel his happiness even through the phone.
If I can choose other department of medicine, maybe I will choose orthopedics because it is the most competitive in making money.
But, I don't want to be a korean doctor if possible, as you know.
See you soon.

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Hello there, Dr. Kim!

My son's birthday was a blast. We ate steak and a special cake courtesy of my oldest sister. My son got sick last Sunday but we managed to go out for a short while and celebrate.

You have done it again! Congratulations and cheers to good profit! The bad luck has been broken and now, Dr. MJ couldn't be any happier. May you all keep up with the good work and service.

Today as we discussed skin cancer, I realized that having one is curable and does not metastasize. Thank you for your clear explanation, it debunked the notions I had in the past. Surely, your client received the best news he can hear before the year ends.

Being an orthopedic doctor is pretty cool too. If I can become a doctor, I would be a neurosurgeon or cardiac surgeon just like the intense dramatic movies!^^ Kidding aside, I find cutting the head an the chest very interesting. If I have done a lot of operations, I can master treating people with a brain or most especially, a heart disease. I would cure poor people because they cannot sue me in court. ^^ I am joking.

Then, please read my grammar suggestions carefully and apply the patterns in your next homework. Your work displays vivid descriptions and and high level of accuracy. Well done!

See you!

-T. Donna~

Hi, T.Donna.
>> Correct!

Congratulations to your son's birthday.
>> Correct!

What kind of meal did you eat with your son?
>> Correct!

Today, I was somewhat satisfied with the profit and the number of patients in the clinic.
>> Correct!

There was one patient who was so worried about the result of his skin tissue examination, because his lesion was not typical and became large quickly.
>> Correct!

In fact, I diagnosed skin cancer many times, so I can distinguish with my eyes basically if the lesion is malignant or not.
>> Correct!

However, his protruding mass didn't look typical benign appearance, so I couldn't comfort him naturally.
>> However, his protruding mass didn't look like a typical benign appearance, so I couldn't comfort him naturally.

This afternoon, I got the result from the institution of tissue examination, and it proved to be benign.
>> Correct!

Thus, I called him immediately and told him about it, and then, I could feel his happiness even through the phone.
>> Correct!

If I can choose other department of medicine, maybe I will choose orthopedics because it is the most competitive in making money.
>>  If I can choose other departments of medicine, maybe I will choose orthopedics because it is the most competitive in making money.

But, I don't want to be a korean doctor if possible, as you know.
>> Correct!
Or: Korean

See you soon.
>> Correct!
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