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~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
What are the best and worst things about being a teenager?

If I have a time machine, I want to go back to my teenage years.
That's how my teenage years remain a valuable time for me.
I think, the reason why I liked my teenage years was that I had no worries.
When I was teenager, I wanted to be in twenties.
At the time, I though that 20s people were the the object of envy.
And I though, If I become an adult, I can to do what I wanted.
But, I'm now 20s, I sometimes want to go back to my teenage years.
My friends from adolescence are on equal footing.
And we are become an adult, everyone goes to different seat.
This means it's like, there are invisible walls or classes.
And we have to live for myself or my family.
My teenage years also to had immature, but I had more fun time than now.
I think the downside is that we don't recognize it good time when we are teenager.

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Hi, Keon!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Camille

~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
What are the best and worst things about being a teenager?

If I have a time machine, I want to go back to my teenage years.
>> CORRECT!
That's how my teenage years remain a valuable time for me.
>> That's why my teenage years remain a valuable time for me.
I think, the reason why I liked my teenage years was that I had no worries.
>> CORRECT!
When I was teenager, I wanted to be in twenties.
>> When I was teenager, I wanted to be in the twenties.
At the time, I though that 20s people were the the object of envy.
>> At the time, I though that people in their 20s were the object of envy.
And I though, If I become an adult, I can to do what I wanted.
>> And I thought, if I become an adult, I can to do what I want.
But, I'm now 20s, I sometimes want to go back to my teenage years.
>> But, I'm now in my 20s, I sometimes want to go back to my teenage years.
My friends from adolescence are on equal footing.
>> CORRECT!
And we are become an adult, everyone goes to different seat.
>> As we become adults, everyone goes to different seats.
This means it's like, there are invisible walls or classes.
>> CORRECT!
And we have to live for myself or my family.
>> And we have to live for ourselves or our families.
My teenage years also to had immature, but I had more fun time than now.
>> In my teenage years, I also had immaturities, but I had more fun time than now.
I think the downside is that we don't recognize it good time when we are teenager.
>> I think the downside is that we don't recognize good times when we were teenagers.

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