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Hi.
There is a good news.
There were many patients/clients and the profit was so good after a long time.
Dr. MJ seemed to be happy, and, of course, I am also happy.
In addition, there was a foreigner who speaks in English.
Despite of her unclear pronunciation, I was so pleased to talk with her in English.
Sometimes there were foreigners before, but most of them couldn't speak English at all, and it made me so sad.
We have foreign patients yesterday as well, but all of them couldn't speak English and one of them could speak Korean very well, and that situation made me frustrated.
There were many conflicts because of our different characters.
I don't have a friend like him excepting Dr.MJ, and vice versa.
He tried to control people around him including me.
He seemed to want me to change my whole life into his way.
I really hate it, and when I complained about it, he got mad, and the next I got mad too.
This is too abstract, I know.
I'll tell you about it in detail someday.
See you.

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Hello, Dr. Kim!

Finally, I can comment and suggest on your composition. Today is my son's birthday and we went out for lunch. 

I am very happy to hear about your profit. I am sure that you are all hoping for the continuous patronage of your clients to keep up with your profit at least for the last two weeks of the year and the start of 2024.

How was speaking with the foreigner? What was his nationality? Well, a little English is still English, so this time, you can realize how hard it is to be an English teacher to a beginner. Anyway, I am delighted to know that you can apply your skills and reinforce your knowledge by speaking to foreigners every now and then.

Dr. MJ will change when the time is right. He needs to mature fast and that time is now. Otherwise, this can hurt your work and it may be a cause of more problems in the future.

You did an excellent job in almost all of your sentences! As you can see, your sentence patterns are now more varied in length and meaning. There is only one suggestion you need to take a look at. Excellent work!

See you soon,

-T. Donna~ 

Hi.
>> Correct!

There is a good news.
>> Correct!

There were many patients/clients and the profit was so good after a long time.
>> Correct!

Dr. MJ seemed to be happy, and, of course, I am also happy.
>> Correct!

In addition, there was a foreigner who speaks in English.
>> Correct!

Despite of her unclear pronunciation, I was so pleased to talk with her in English.
>> Correct!

Sometimes there were foreigners before, but most of them couldn't speak English at all, and it made me so sad.
>> Correct!

We have foreign patients yesterday as well, but all of them couldn't speak English and one of them could speak Korean very well, and that situation made me frustrated.
>> Correct! Very good sentence!

There were many conflicts because of our different characters.
>> Correct!

I don't have a friend like him excepting Dr.MJ, and vice versa.
>> I don't have a friend except Dr.MJ, and vice versa.

He tried to control people around him including me.
>> Correct!

He seemed to want me to change my whole life into his way.
>> Correct!

I really hate it, and when I complained about it, he got mad, and the next I got mad too.
>> Correct!

This is too abstract, I know.
>> Correct!

I'll tell you about it in detail someday.
>> Correct!

See you.
>> Correct!
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