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~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
What things about your country do you think Korean people are proud of?

I think many Koreans have a strong sense of pride in South Korea.
One of them is the unexpected rapid economic growth after the Korean War.
I'll explain the history of Korea.
Korea's former country name is Joseon.
The Joseon has a history of more than 500 years.
But end of the Joseon, the country was take away by Japan.
After liberation form Japan, a few years later Korea is go to the Korea War.
The Korean War made devastated the country.
After war thanks to the support and efforts of many countries, the economy grow fast.
Today Korea is 70 years after the war.
So, many Koreans are proud of rapid growth South Korea.

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Hi, Keon!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Camille


~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
What things about your country do you think Korean people are proud of?


I think many Koreans have a strong sense of pride in South Korea.
>> CORRECT!
One of them is the unexpected rapid economic growth after the Korean War.
>> CORRECT!
I'll explain the history of Korea.
>> CORRECT!
Korea's former country name is Joseon.
>> CORRECT!
The Joseon has a history of more than 500 years.
>> CORRECT!
But end of the Joseon, the country was take away by Japan.
>> But at the end of the Joseon dynasty, the country was take away by Japan.
After liberation form Japan, a few years later Korea is go to the Korea War.
>> After the liberation from Japan, a few years later Korea went through the Korea War.
The Korean War made devastated the country.
>> The Korean War made my countrymen devastated.
After war thanks to the support and efforts of many countries, the economy grow fast.
>> After the war, thanks to the support and efforts of many countries, the economy grew fast.
Today Korea is 70 years after the war.
>> Today marks the 70th year of South Korea after the war.
So, many Koreans are proud of rapid growth South Korea.
>> So, many Koreans are proud of South Korea's rapid growth.

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