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How does rain change your feelings?

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Definitely, it makes my feelings gloomy. Also, I don't want to do everything as commuting, going out, and housework. Just, it pushes me too lazy. I'm pretty sure most men of Korean who did military service don't like the weather like rain, snow. Especially snow, clearing snow that men hate the most is thing. The reason why they should do it is a geography. There are a lot of mountains in Korea. So, the snowplow can't come to that. In addition to that, the soldier is the most cheap about personnel expenses only in South Korea.

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Good day, Eric!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Camille


Definitely, it makes my feelings gloomy. 
>> CORRECT!
Also, I don't want to do everything as commuting, going out, and housework. 
>> CORRECT!
Just, it pushes me too lazy. 
>> Just, it pushes me to be too lazy. 
I'm pretty sure most men of Korean who did military service don't like the weather like rain, snow.
>> I'm pretty sure most men in Korea who did military service don't like the weather like rain or snow.
Especially snow, clearing snow that men hate the most is thing. 
>> Especially snow, clearing snow is what men hate the most.
The reason why they should do it is a geography. 
>> The reason why they should do it is because of the geography. 
There are a lot of mountains in Korea. 
>> CORRECT!
So, the snowplow can't come to that. 
>> CORRECT!
In addition to that, the soldier is the most cheap about personnel expenses only in South Korea.
>> In addition to that, soldiers are the cheapest personnel to have the least expenses only in South Korea.

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