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Is life complicated?

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Of course, yes. I think the life is so complicated for everyone. We don't even know what is gonna happen for the next. Even if we are trying to guess or predict something is gonna happen in the future, it will be different from that I expected. We just know that we should appreciate that we are still living now. That's my attitude for my life because we don't know if we can have another life or when we are gonna pass away. so.. Life is definitely complicated.

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Hi Ha Lin, well done on accomplishing your homework. Here are the corrections and revisions; I hope it helps.
Sincerely,
^^ T. Ara

Of course, yes. 
>>> CORRECT!
I think the life is so complicated for everyone. 
>>>  I think life is complicated for everyone.
We don't even know what is gonna happen for the next. 
>>> We don't even know what is going to happen next.
Even if we are trying to guess or predict something is gonna happen in the future, it will be different from that I expected. 
>>> Even if we try to guess or predict something that will happen in the future, it often turns out differently from what I expected.
We just know that we should appreciate that we are still living now. 
>>> We just know that we should appreciate being alive now.
That's my attitude for my life because we don't know if we can have another life or when we are gonna pass away. 
>>> That's my attitude towards life because we don't know if we'll have another life or when we will pass away.
so.. Life is definitely complicated.
>>> So, life is definitely complicated.
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