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The ideal society

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I bellieve that it is natural for public to express interests and respects to someone in specific status in ideal society since status is a symbol of efforts.
However, we need to express credit for status not belonging at birth but achieving over time.
Someone who has status can advise to public related to the ways for achieving status and convey various informations with his own insights.
Understanding the contents and reflecting our life is crucial for us to gain several statuses.

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Thank you for your homework, Yu Jin!

Keep moving forward!

-Hanna ^^

I bellieve that it is natural for public to express interests and respects to someone in specific status in ideal society since status is a symbol of efforts.

>>I believe that in an ideal society, it is natural for the public to express interest and respect for individuals with specific status, as status often symbolizes dedicated efforts. 
However, we need to express credit for status not belonging at birth but achieving over time.

>>However, it is important to acknowledge and give credit to individuals who have achieved their status over time, rather than simply inheriting it at birth.
Someone who has status can advise to public related to the ways for achieving status and convey various informations with his own insights.

>>Those who have attained a certain status can offer valuable advice to the public on ways to achieve similar status and share various insights.
Understanding the contents and reflecting our life is crucial for us to gain several statuses.

>>Understanding the content and applying it to our lives is crucial for us to attain and embody various statuses.

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