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If there isn¡¯t the religion
The world would be in confusion
They might not feel having conscious
Of crime.
And they couldn¡¯t be patient.
So a lot of criminal would happen to my naver.
We can learn a lot of things through the religion. Such as love forgiveness and thankful like this.

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Ms. Sunny,
I understand that you do not have any religion but most of your insights are correct. Religion teaches and guides us on basic principles. 
Thank you for answering this. See you in class!
Aki~


If there isn¡¯t the religion. The world would be in confusion
>>> If there isn't any religion, the world will be in confusion.

They might not feel having conscious Of crime.
>>> People might not be conscious of crime.

And they couldn¡¯t be patient.
>>> CORRECT!

So a lot of criminal would happen to my naver.
>>> So a lot of crimes would happen to my neighborhood.

We can learn a lot of things through the religion. 
>>>  We can gain valuable insights and knowledge by studying and practicing religion.

Such as love forgiveness and thankful like this.
>>> CORRECT!
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