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I often read self-help books.
The main content of most self-help books talks about the power of positive thinking.
The positive thinking is one of the most powerful weapons.
If we think positive, everything will work out for us.
But to be honest, I think it's hard to think positively.

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Hi Sir Gwon! ^^ 

Thinking positively makes life less stressful. 
Instead of being angry of small things, it is easier to just smile. 
Thinking negatively absorbs all my energy that makes me so tired. 
It's better to think positively because it also affects the mood of other people. 

Andrea 

I often read self-help books.
>> I often read self-improvement books.

The main content of most self-help books talks about the power of positive thinking.
>> Self-improvement books main contents is about the power of positive thinking.

The positive thinking is one of the most powerful weapons.
>> Positive thinking is one of the most powerful weapons. 

If we think positive, everything will work out for us.
>> If we think positively, everything work out for us. 

But to be honest, I think it's hard to think positively.
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