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Which places in the world do you think are too dangerous to visit? Why are they dangerous?

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I think many places are too dangerous to visit.
First, there are the conflict zones or the countries that are currently at war.
Conflict zones or warring countries will not be able to go easily because Korea prevents from traveling to protect its citizens, but border areas will also be dangerous.
Second, countries with very low women's rights or countries with dangerous organizations.
For example, countries such as Afghanistan, where the Taliban are in power, and Somalia, where pirates are frequent.
Last, it is the country where the epidemic is placing.
In general, countries that can spread dangerous infectious diserases such as SARS, MERS, and COVID-19, including malaria and typhoid, which are prevented or extinguished diseases, are considered dangerous.

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Good morning, Yun. Your response about the places considered too dangerous to visit is very insightful. It is very detailed and well-explained. Great job! Thanks for this. See you later! ^^
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Homework: Which places in the world do you think are too dangerous to visit? Why are they dangerous?
I think many places are too dangerous to visit.
>> Correct
First, there are the conflict zones or the countries that are currently at war.
>> Correct
Conflict zones or warring countries will not be able to go easily because Korea prevents from traveling to protect its citizens, but border areas will also be dangerous.
>> Conflict zones or warring countries will not be able to go easily because Korea prevents travelers travelers from traveling to protect its citizens, but border areas will also be dangerous.
Second, countries with very low women's rights or countries with dangerous organizations.
>> Correct
>> OR: Secondly, countries with severe violations of women's rights or nations harboring dangerous organizations.
For example, countries such as Afghanistan, where the Taliban are in power, and Somalia, where pirates are frequent.
>> Correct
Last, it is the country where the epidemic is placing.
>> Last, it is the country where the epidemic is occurring.
>> OR: Lastly, countries experiencing epidemics pose additional risks.
In general, countries that can spread dangerous infectious diserases such as SARS, MERS, and COVID-19, including malaria and typhoid, which are prevented or extinguished diseases, are considered dangerous.
>> In general, countries that can spread dangerous infectious diseases such as SARS, MERS, and COVID-19, including malaria and typhoid, which are prevented or extinguished diseases, are considered dangerous.
>> OR: In general, countries capable of spreading dangerous infectious diseases like SARS, MERS, and COVID-19, as well as preventable or eradicated diseases such as malaria and typhoid, are considered risky to visit.
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