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I think tourism helps peolple understand eachother. Because when we tour somewhere, we can feel many culture.
I think every site has their own story, so we can feel history. knowing cultures and histories make people understand each other. Additionally we can talk with many people, talking is the best way to get to know someone.

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Good day, Hye Lin! I love reading your composition. You never fail to express your honest opinions. Tourism offers great opportunities for emerging economies and developing countries. Tourism also contributes to local infrastructure development and can help to conserve the natural environment and cultural assets and traditions. We can definitely talk more about this topic tomorrow. Have a great day. Stay warm!~T. Lyn
I think tourism helps peolple understand eachother. 
>>I think tourism helps people understand each other.
Because when we tour somewhere, we can feel many culture.
>>When you travel, you can experience various cultures.
I think every site has their own story, so we can feel history. 
>>I think every site has its own story, allowing use to feel the history.
knowing cultures and histories make people understand each other. 
>>Knowing the culture and history help people understand each other.
Additionally we can talk with many people, talking is the best way to get to know someone.
>>Additionally, we can talk to a lot of people. Conversation is the best way to get to know someone.
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